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matti omg...

I have no idea what to say it was just amazing and more than good. sadly that part 7 is over but part 8 is still to come. please let havu and maria be a couple for always

thanks a lot for this great story

Almost 3 months of writing and just 2 days to post it. You read 55 pages. The longest story I ever wrote. thank you soooo much for your patience!

I'm really happy that you like it. But I think that you guessed that it was Matti who was in the basement At least a couple of times you made the right hypothesis. It was not easy for me to hide the "reality" and to give little evidences. Especially the diary (what to write, how to use codes,...) and also to manage "who knows what".

I will try to write the last part a bit faster but always to keep the quality high. This part could be the end of the story but I think that something is missing. Like the reaction of the friends, what happens with the Happonen couple, the secret about the money of Ahonen and the private life of Arttu. And of course to end the Russian mafia case of Havu. It's why I want to write another part.

Thank you soooo much for your great comments!

I'm sorry that I've read the whole story in two days

let you all the time with part 8. I can wait and have time for new guesses.

I totally agree. arttu is important, his daughter suvi (and maybe her boyfriend?). be nice to havu

you're welcome. it was a pleasure

Don't be sorry for the fast reading If I was bad like my sister with her fiction I would have posted only one little part per day

I also decided to don't kill everybody in this part because I was quite sure that I'll need a 8th part and I was not really in the mood to introduce many new characters. But I can already told you that there will be a new girl in the story. The sister of Havu I don't say more about her

Yeah and Suvi. She is so interesting. It's like the Lindström boys. I will use them a bit more.

one happonen more, great this could be funny. her name is sanna?

nina could die in part 8. its the best for all.

Yep, one more Happonen in the story First I wanted to name her Iirja. Then I thought that it was a ugly name and I gave it to the ex-wife of Arttu I know that I had a name for her but I can't remember it Maybe it will be Sanna Who knows

Ah Nina. What will be her destiny? Everything is almost planned for her

call her sanna. thats her name in real life too

you could be so bad as you want to her. nina is a monster

Okay. Then I will use this name.

I think that you won't be disappointed with Nina

sounds good

so, I let you in peace now. thanks again have a nice weekend and next week nice holidays. no hurry with part 8

Thanks a lot and I wish you also a nice weekend!

See you very soon here (I hope).

thanks

sure you will

Today I wrote the first chapter. It is with Havu, Arttu and Matti.

Some other chapters are already written. Altoghter I have 10 pages. Well I know, it's not much.

This was the update.

thanks for this.
about what is the chapter...

It's about Havu and his couple problems. He has to choose with who he wants to spend time: his family or Matti. Arttu is a mediator.

this must be great

I hope it is I will share with you the half of the first paragraph

The inspector Jalonen was happy to turn off his computer after a long day at work. He was over sixty with white hair and moustache. He was the supervisor of the best inspectors of the police of Helsinki. His job was very stressful but he liked it a lot. The less funny parts were the hundreds of reports to write and the press conferences. He was used to it. He was at this post since fifteen years but he still didn’t like it. He took his coat and turned off the light. When he closed the door he saw that there was still light in one of the offices. He walked there and checked if everything was alright. The door was opened and he saw Janne Happonen in front of his computer eating some chips. “It’s half past eight. You should go home. I need you in good shape tomorrow morning,” Jalonen advised. “I’m at home. I’m watching the news on the Internet. I’m not working,” Havu replied.

poor havu
but sad, that his workingplace is havu's home now. hope that everything wil be fine with maria and havu

I don't know why but I like to make him suffer

You'll see later what will happen to them

just bad


when is later

I don't know. At the moment I've only written chapters with Havu. I've to add some in between with Arttu, Rane, Vellu, Anssi and so on.