Feedback: "Finnish stories: hypocrisy and selfishness"

no, this sounds pretty good

nina would have to die by her own weapons

hope that arttu's dog pillow is still alive and his cute daughter suvi

You'll see what will happen to Nina. But yes, she will pay.

I'm not bad with the kids... well... rarely. But don't worry. Nothing happened to her and the dog is safe

for what the guy needed the money from rane...? I will see in the next part...

tiia's rich boyfriend is gone... oh, poor she. no one who paid the botox-stuff
but anssi's girl

you're so right for Tiia she will have to find another victim.

Of course in the next part you'll know more about each situation. It will start where that one stopped. There is no jump in time.

tiia and arttu he earns enough money

I was thinking the same! Poor Arttu. Let's see if he sees the trap or not

NOOOOOOOOOOO, this was a joke he needs a girl who is nice, loyal, funny, supported him in every way etc

Of course

Tomorrow I'll try to write a better scenario and organize a bit all my ideas. I've to see again what I'll do with the Kroisos guys. I think a funny chapter again with a weird gig But after the last one on the boat, it's pretty tough to do better.

The character of Vellu is boring. I should do something with him.

A little love story for Mr Lappi.

For the "main" guys it must be okay.

his son could kill the rabbit and havu has to determine

but a love story with happy end and wedding

what do you want to write better???

Kimi is a very interesting character and I have some ideas for him. It's just Vellu himself who is boring.

My aim with the Kroisos was that everytime you start to read the chapter you'll think: "What will happen to them? What will go wrong? Who will ruin the show?". They are the funny idiots of the story. But I think that this "image" has been already used too often. I've to find something else to surprise you. It's why it has to be better everytime.

Havu will have a lot of work and not only because of Kimi.

I think that Arttu will be the "sweet" event of that dark story. Nice contrast.

vellu need a affair--> tiia???

the band could have a female singer, for example. a girl like tarja (ex-nightwish)

but please let havu a bit family-life. it's important. but he could be more clumsy

arttu, the sweet event- that's so cool

nice ideas Maybe you should also write stories.

no, i'm too bad for that... it's always your turn. i can give you same tipps and advices if you want

I really like your tips. They add some "spices" to the main story. I think that I expected the story to be in 3 or 4 parts because I was only counting the main story. But I think that it would be too direct and maybe ununderstandable. It's better with all these little stories around. And finally they are almost all involved in the main story in a way or another.

do it the way you want it.
I've always seen by so far. All the little stories always have loosened up a bit. thus it is never boring. because you always want to know how it goes on.

That's good it hear

I've seen that I messed up with the age of the little Lindström. I wrote that the oldest was 10 years old in this part and when I read the frist part again the kid is born in 2013... Oliver should be 13. I'll be more careful in the next part. I think that it can be fun to read the whole saga from the beginning. Currently I've the feeling that there is no mistake except the age of the kids. But maybe there are some others.

that's not a problem... it could happened

yes, the whole saga as a book. that must be great...

I spent my afternoon in a café and I wrote the scenario of the 6th part. I don't know if it's complete but at least I'm sure to don't forget the most important events. It's written half in French and half in English It's a total mess and I hope that I will be able to use it

http://i10.photobucket.com/albums/a118/ptitpou6/FS6.jpg

OMG! that looks professional.
aber so viel arbeit musst du dir nicht machen

It's just a list of events per character. The first column is Arttu

It was not much work, don't worry.