Feedback: "Finnish stories: hypocrisy and selfishness"

ui, arttu <-- sorry

then i'm calm. let you the time you need. I do not run away

You are really crazy about Arttu I thought that Havu was your favorite.

The order on the paper is random. Havu who is the main character has the column 4.

I'll continue the writing tomorrow. I've already to change something according to my new plan.

If you have any whish, please tell me and I'll see what I can do to make it true

I like both, arttu and havu miss both in skijumping

and what's your new plan

I've told you my wishes

Havu will be back for sure. I don't know if he'll jump in summer But it's true that Arttu is deeply missing... I think that the last time I saw him was in Einsiedeln in 2008...

The new plan is the piece of paper I wrote. But before I started the writing. It was too messy and not enough detailed. I also wrote an event that was too soon. I keep it for later. It will be another little story that I'll try to make funny ^^

I've included all your wishes I guess. Let's see how the story will look like.

I hope so, havu's needed. but maybe it's the best for arttu...why should he torture himself, if the training does not pay
that cutie havu is 27 now

do it not do too detailed otherwise its' too much information- might distract from the actual topic

I let myself be surprised...

It's always sad when a jumper has to end his career because of injuries. If I remember well Arttu had some troubles after a knee surgery. And it was not the same again... That's a pity.

That's right... Havu is 27. It's time to jump full time ^^ Let's hope that that injury was the last one.

I've written 3 chapters but they are not completed. There was so much during and after the storm that I was almost thinking of writing a chapter per character. Let's see how it will be. Or maybe the first chapter will be 10 pages long. Let's see.

sure, it is really he had? I didn't know this

don't say this- havu will jump till he's an oldie hope so, that this was the last forever

ui, that means that part6 will be longer like the ohter ones ( )

I don't know if it will be longer. In the other parts the first chapter was quite long too. Between 6 and 10 pages. But if I see that it's too long (close to 40 pages) I will probably write a 7th part. I don't like too long stories. Longer it is and easier it is to make mistakes and the text can become boring.

I have nothing against a 7th part

It will maybe turn to a never ending story

Initially "Finnish Stories: Confessions" was the introduction. Then the part 2 was until the death of Matti. But already there I needed 2 parts and not one. Then the part 3 was supposed to be an intermediate part between 2 big events. As you read the first big event only arrived at the end of the part... 5! I'll try to write about this intermediate part in the 6th episode. But then there is another part... Let's see how it goes. The thing is that I don't like to write "2 years later" and to explained events in one paragraph. And as you wrote the little stories around the main one are also interesting and sometimes very important in the evolution of the main story.

why do you have a problem with "2 years later" writing? maybe this is better that the saga will not be a never ending story

I will maybe use it at some point. But I realized that it was quite important to show little by little what Nina was doing. And that it's a long work. It's not like she had a crazy idea and made it true in 2 weeks. An interestant part of the story, in my opinion, is how Havu and the others are discovering what she is doing and what Matti did. But now the story should go faster. and another point was the additional characters. They added plenty of little chapters. Plus Arttu modified the story. He was supposed to have a small role but then he became a main character. I don't like to use characters and let them down without a reason. And the saga is Finnish stories not Finnish story.

I can tell you that already 3 characters died in 18 pages of writing of the 6th part Well you already know for Uhro.

3 are dead that's a beginning
let me guess: harri, vellu and nina...

Only one is correct

Today I wrote a chapter 100% Arttu

nina, i think no, it's not her...

100% arttu... what's the chapter about?

Arttu is looking for something... no, for someone as you wished

And I decided to be a bit bad with Havu. He has been too lucky until now

you're so great and what's her name?

no, that's not good. maybe maria has an affair with velu poor cutie havu

you're so great and what's her name?

should I say it there is a little surprise. you'll see But it's not Tiia

no, that's not good. maybe maria has an affair with velu poor cutie havu

It's worse

surprise? sounds very very interessant

and what for bad things you want to do with havu?

He will suffer a little bit. But don't worry. He is still alive